Saturday, May 29, 2010

Not yet....


Another Saturday Centus, a themed writing meme. The challenge is to write 100 words to add to the prompt started by Jenny Matlock from off on my tangent.

The writing prompt is in itallics....


It’d been so long since she’d seen him.

When he reached for her hand the pain of years separated melted away.

“I’ve missed you” Daddy said spinning her around “ Look at you, all grown up and pretty as ever”.

She closed her eyes tight, it felt wonderful to be with him again.

A booming voice startled her eyes open.

“May I help you, miss? You look puzzled.”
“Mmmm… thank you, I’m just looking for my father. We came in together a moment ago, but he seems to have wandered off.”

A confused Missy told the bearded man dressed in white.

“MISSY, MISSY!!! Come on honey ” another voice called.

The flat line on the screen came roaring back to life.

 Bleep... bleep... bleep....

And Dr. Jonah Simpson felt again Godlike.

20 comments:

  1. Ha! Absolutely love your comment about comments!

    I'm visiting from Lady Bloggers social tea. Now following -- and will be returning. Have a great day!

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  2. Mr. Jenny says "this is what the prompt is supposed to be...people going in all different directions! Very creative!"

    And I say wow, where the heck did that come from? I wouldn't have seen that train track even with my reading glasses AND my contacts on!

    Really fun!

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  3. Very enjoyable! I loved your take on this!

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  4. Wow. Totally unexpected, and you packed so much into that short piece, it took me right out of myself and into the story immediately. Brava!

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  5. This is definitely unexpected! I loved it though, what a ride you took us on in only 100 words. :)

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  6. This was really good. Something I wouldn't of have thought of. Great job.

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  7. Creative take on the prompt. Nice!

    =)

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  8. I love this post, the clan writing and the twist at the end. I posted my story before reading any others. I like to do that just so I won't unconsciously go in a direction that's not entirely my own. Could we be soul sisters?

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  9. Very nice...one that I will read again...Peace

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  10. This gave me the chills. Beautiful!! Very creative interpretation of the writing prompt. Stopping by from the Lady Bloggers Tea Party and following. I'll be back :)

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  11. very creative! i really enjoyed reading this and your take on Jenny's meme! Wonderful!

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  12. Aww, how sad/adorable/amazing all in one. I loved it!

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  13. Loved it, too! It's so interesting the differences in the way the men and women reacted to this prompt!

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  14. Dear KOBY: WOW what a piece. Took me completely by surprise..But you do that alot...LOL Ms Moose

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  15. Great job, Koby! What a creative use of the prompt! Definitely thinking outside the box on this one! Well done!

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  16. Bravo! You really caught me by surprise.

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  17. Really good job, I like your take on it x

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  18. Wow! I was not expecting that at all. Great take on this week's prompt! Kathy

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