Saturday, June 19, 2010

I am who I am.....

Saturday Centus time, a themed writing meme. The challenge is to write 100 words to add to the prompt started by Jenny Matlock from off on my tangent.

The writing prompt is in itallics...

Guys don’t become fathers at 16, at least if they’re smart they don’t. There’d been so many days that I wanted to run, to escape my new life. Sometimes I found myself resenting the kid, then I’d remember it’s not his fault, he didn’t ask to be here. Stupid, stupid parents this poor kid has.

This day we‘re left alone, reluctant father and his small boy, all alone for the first time, We sit at opposite ends of a long wall sizing each other up a bit, he moved first, toward me.

Ironically,

it was Fathers Day, 1984, when I heard that voice in the hallway,

”DA…dada” he said, adding a toothless grin.

16 comments:

  1. That is so good having just sat and watched Teen parents it must be hard to cope.

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  2. Ooh - I got a shiver - nice one! Well done!

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  3. How real this one is....
    Good work!

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  4. I love a story with a moral - and a happy ending!

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  5. What a wonderful story you've told here Koby. It could have been real...

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  6. I love a story that ends with a hopeful beginning. Great job!

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  7. Oooooh, that's a good one! Gave me a little glow at the end.

    =)

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  8. Nice approach to the prompt...well written and inticing.

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  9. Really nice use of the prompt. My heart breaks whenever I see teen parents and this really brought home the terrifying reality of being in that situation. Great job. Kathy

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  10. Very well done...great idea for this prompt...Peace and blessings

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  11. This was very good. All boys 16 should read it ;-). Very educational and a very interesting take on Saturday Centus. Good job.

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  12. Good stuff. Different take about whose words were heard. I really like this.

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  13. I like how you developed this. Great job!

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  14. Very nice take on the prompt! Very well done.

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  15. I love this post for two reasons!

    Number one. It is amazing. Such a neat twist on the prompt. Really excellent.

    Number two. It is 113 degrees today and it is hot in my office AND it made me have goosebumps!

    Really, really cool!

    Thank you for linking!

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