Saturday Centus time, a themed writing meme. The challenge is to write 100 words to add to the prompt started by Jenny Matlock from off on my tangent.
The writing prompt is in itallics...
Guys don’t become fathers at 16, at least if they’re smart they don’t. There’d been so many days that I wanted to run, to escape my new life. Sometimes I found myself resenting the kid, then I’d remember it’s not his fault, he didn’t ask to be here. Stupid, stupid parents this poor kid has.
This day we‘re left alone, reluctant father and his small boy, all alone for the first time, We sit at opposite ends of a long wall sizing each other up a bit, he moved first, toward me.
Ironically,
it was Fathers Day, 1984, when I heard that voice in the hallway,
”DA…dada” he said, adding a toothless grin.
Saturday, June 19, 2010
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That is so good having just sat and watched Teen parents it must be hard to cope.
ReplyDeleteOoh - I got a shiver - nice one! Well done!
ReplyDeleteHow real this one is....
ReplyDeleteGood work!
I love a story with a moral - and a happy ending!
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful story you've told here Koby. It could have been real...
ReplyDeleteI love a story that ends with a hopeful beginning. Great job!
ReplyDeleteOooooh, that's a good one! Gave me a little glow at the end.
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Aww..cute. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteNice approach to the prompt...well written and inticing.
ReplyDeleteReally nice use of the prompt. My heart breaks whenever I see teen parents and this really brought home the terrifying reality of being in that situation. Great job. Kathy
ReplyDeleteVery well done...great idea for this prompt...Peace and blessings
ReplyDeleteThis was very good. All boys 16 should read it ;-). Very educational and a very interesting take on Saturday Centus. Good job.
ReplyDeleteGood stuff. Different take about whose words were heard. I really like this.
ReplyDeleteI like how you developed this. Great job!
ReplyDeleteVery nice take on the prompt! Very well done.
ReplyDeleteI love this post for two reasons!
ReplyDeleteNumber one. It is amazing. Such a neat twist on the prompt. Really excellent.
Number two. It is 113 degrees today and it is hot in my office AND it made me have goosebumps!
Really, really cool!
Thank you for linking!