Sunday, August 29, 2010

Free at last....

Oooooh that Jenny Matlock over at off on my tangent really has us is her Saturday Centus challenge for this week....

Take any other Saturday Centus story (yours or someone else’s) and using ANOTHER 100 WORDS...tell us the "rest of the story".

Please copy and paste the first story so we can read both entries easily.
A 100 word story that tells the rest of any previous Saturday Centus!, 
The story I chose to "finish" was started by a lovely lady over at a blog called Moonlight Hollow ( Hers is in blue, my "finish"will be in black/ bold itallics...)
It was an act of love.
He pulled the white sheets off my shoulders. His hand moved down my arm until it entwined itself with mine.

“Is this the way you want it?” he asked softly.

Pure love existed in that moment. I had one foot in reality and the other in heaven.

“I want you to do it now,” I whispered.

He didn’t hesitate. His body moved next to mine as he covered me with warm kisses.

As I snuggled into the crook of his arm, he reached down and unplugged my ventilator.

It was an act of love. That’s why it meant so much.
For weeks and weeks I rested on a cloud and watched his sadness.
His growing depression made it apparent he was second guessing what he’d done.

An act that weighed more heavily than I could have imagined when I first made the request.

Shackle free...

I’ll visit as a butterfly, just like I promised,

I’ll land on his arm, and flutter above his head.

And dart in and out of the flowers in our garden.

Carried by the wind, I’ll soar, and float and sail.

Letting him know that all is right in the place I now call home.


  1. I never read the first one and wondered where it could go? but you continued it wonderfully ... beautifully written! and thank you for the story loan :o)

  2. I love that you chose Moonlight Hollow's original to use this week. I adored that the first time I read it and it was nice to see it again. You treated this with wonderful kid gloves. I'd like to believe this is what happens next.

  3. love what you did with the original. great job!

  4. I love that you took a chance with someone's Centus and added to it. Your addition was amazing and so wonderfully written. Great job.

  5. The original was one I really enjoyed, and your addition is quite beautiful.


  6. Dear Koby: WOW, you did it again. I really thought you were becomming X rated then WOW...I was so surprised...I love the entire post. You are such a talented and intresting writer....Lots of Love, Ms Moose

  7. As a hospice nurse, I have experienced patients who receive messages from beyond. This is beautiful, and I commend you for taking on another's work to continue. I didn't have the guts. Bravo!

  8. This was beautifully written! I was not brave enough to take on someone else's story, for fear of making mincemeat out of it. You did a fantastic job of continuing with the same "voice". Loved this!

  9. Really beautifully done, Koby. What a poetic and lovely ending to a heartbreakingly sad story.
    Great job!

  10. I loved Moonlight Hollow's SC.

    I loved that you took it on.

    I loved what you made me feel.

    This was superb.

    Thank you.


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