Saturday, July 10, 2010

You belong to me.....

Saturday Centus time, a themed writing meme. This week's challenge is to write 200 words to add to the prompt started by Jenny Matlock from off on my tangent. It has to be Harlequin Romance style....(I don't believe I've ever read a Harlequin Romance forgive me if my "bodice ripping" is reserved for the imagination.)

The writing prompt is in itallics...

Without thinking I brushed back the bang that had fallen over his eye.

As my hand dropped he reached for it and held it for just a second.

That second was long enough to make my face flush. And my heart race.

A reaction as familiar to me as my own name.

I knew him well enough to know he felt it too.

“How long you here for?” I tried to make small talk.

“Just till Monday” he answered.

Three days. Not a lot of time, but maybe, just maybe, enough.

Come home and see your children I want to say. Come sit in your rocking chair and pet your dog. While you’re there maybe you can check out the furnace, its making that strange noise again.

“Where would you like the kids to meet you?” I ask.

I smell her, even before he looks over my shoulder to acknowledge her, I know she’s there.

Still, when I turned around I was startled to meet a green-eyed gaze...

My oldest, dearest best friend ever, the wrecker of my formerly happy home, within striking distance.

I want to bloody her perfect peach glossed lips.

They turn up at the edges in a smirk.

“He’s mine” her smile says “I had him first.”


  1. Wow! Wow! I love this! I am really impressed. Sweet and sad and real and tender and tragic!

    This is really excellent!

    Thanks for linking. I'm glad you took the shake up challenge and came out so wonderfully!

  2. I liked the part about the furnace and, when he's done, can he come to my place? I've got some trouble with clogged pipes.

  3. I loved the part about the bloody lip.

    This really was truly amazing. No way I could pull this off.

  4. That was impressive. Seriously. You managed the style without the cheese, something I'm having a hard time with today.

  5. Oho, a battle! Nice tension in this, great job :)

  6. Oooo! Great! I'm really nervous about taking part this week! You've done a brilliant job!

  7. Really nicely done! You took this challenge and ran with it. I have visions of Alexis and Crystal Carrington :) Kat

  8. You did a masterful job with this! Loved it!


  9. WOW WOW WOW~ this was just excellent. Simply perfect. I wanted to keep reading so nailed it.

  10. OUCH! Her best friend? OUCH, OUCH, OUCH!

    I enjoyed!


  11. Terribly tragic. That tramp! That Trollop!

  12. I've never read a romance novel, but this story does not yet have a happy ending ;-( well done....Peace

  13. Sadly, true life in the fast lane...
    Love what you did with this weeks challenge is awesome!

  14. Wow, Koby, that was intense! Great job on nailing this so very well!

  15. Wow, this was really great. The best friend too what a twist. Great Centus.

  16. LOVE that meme,great work with it!
    Stopped by from Lady Bloggers Tea Party...

  17. Koby,
    Everything about this post drips romance novel. Great work!

    ..........cj Schlottman

  18. I really enjoyed reading the posts on your blog. I would like to invite you to come on over to my blog and check it out. God's blessings. Lloyd


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