Saturday, December 11, 2010

Twist it (shake your tail feather).....


This post is a themed writing project challenge taken from Jenny Matlock over at off on my tangent.

Jenny says we can use UP to 100 words to tell our story. It can be fact or fiction. Jenny posts a few words, a prompt that we work from. This weeks prompt is in bold italics.


An involuntary gasp of shock escaped my lips when I opened the shoebox and saw the pointy-toed shoes, then tears slipped down my cheeks.

The new shoes were a gift from my girls, and not in any way unlike, other than size, the pair I wish I’d been given 50 years earlier.

At that time the needs of a small, poor girl went seemingly unnoticed, except maybe by God.

I don't know if there were others who knew too that I had no proper shoes to wear to a wedding…?

But my daughters knew the story and wanted to end it differently.

So 50 years later,

at this anniversary party I would dance.

Wearing my new shoes.


Not part of the Saturday Centus...but just in case a little girl who once had no shoes (yet still managed to dance) happens to happen by...this is for her.

21 comments:

  1. Very nice, capturese a lot of emotion.

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  2. Love the girls, who understood that emotion so well..

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  3. Awwww. I liked this one. A lot.

    =)

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  4. A sad tale but a happy ending - lovely!

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  5. Very touching take on this prompt. I liked it!

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  6. Absolutely lovely !! completely touched !! And finally one post does not scare me :D

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  7. So very touching. I love the happy ending.

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  8. Sweet centus today. Very sentimental. Good job.

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  9. Dear PPB: Yes she did recognize the "shoe story" and she loves you for your insight and wonderful writing talent....Where on earth did that awesome talent come from??? PBB you got it all.....LOL mom

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  10. Aw, how thoughtful of those girls! Sweet take on this one!

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  11. Nice blend of emotional shadow and light :)

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  12. Touching and lovely. Nice work!

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  13. this just makes me say... Awwwwww

    so sweet and beautiful

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  14. This was a particularly moving post.

    Blues Brothers??? I ADORE them, and always have!!

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  15. A lovely emotional take...girls do have a way of knowing how to make mom smile... :)

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  16. awww ... evokes such emotion ... and is so sweet at the same time. wonderful words!

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  17. Your video made me almost as happy as did your sweet and heartfelt post. Good writing....and great taste in music!

    Namaste..........cj

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  18. What a sweet and tender story! Great job on this one Koby! I loved the video too!

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  19. It's so funny. When I wrote this prompt I had elf shoes in mind...and even my story didn't make it about elf shoes.

    Really loved this poignant little post.

    Thanks for a sweet link.

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  20. Dear Koby,
    Beautifully touching story. I am late in commenting, so I don't know how most people handled this subject. But I do know that memories can hit a nerve; even with pointy-toed shoes. It is sweet when children love and know their parent so well that they can choose a present that heals a sore spot in their soul.

    Well done.
    Best wishes,
    Anna
    Anna's SC wk 32

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