Saturday, September 3, 2011

Are you with me darling.....?

 The post is a themed writing project challenge taken from Jenny Matlock over at off on my tangent.

Jenny says we can use UP to 100 words to tell a story.
It can be fact or fiction. Jenny posts a few words, a prompt that we work from.

As always the prompt is in bold italics.

Their freshly delivered dinner sat on the counter getting cold as Ed and Sara worked on their communication issues…

“ You don’t listen to a word I say !!!” Sara cried. “ I talk, you don’t listen”

“ Like Charlie Brown’s teacher talking !!! “

“ Whah whah whah….!!!!”

“Whah, whah....”


“ A woman needs to feel heard, understood.”

“Her conversation partner should be invested, engaged!

Sara imagined the wheels in Ed’s head turning.

He was getting it…  was tuned in, engaged.

Ed lifted the box top…

“What kind of pizza is this?

Sara’s glass of root beer answered the question when it fell on his head.


  1. Sounds like they have a long road ahead...:@)

  2. Ouch! He deserved it, though. The allusion to Charlie Brown's teacher is perfect. Who could ever forget that?


  3. This is great! I can so totally relate to the conversation! Nice job!

  4. Great writing! I already was laughing my head off at A Happier than a Pig in Mud! This was a great story! They have some work enjoy your weekend. Anne to do don't they?

  5. Relationship counseling. Fast!


    PS. Nice job on the dialogue.

  6. Perfect! Only I wouldn't have wasted the root beer. I would have grabbed the pizza and left! They say the way to a man's heart is through his stomach. And if he is hungry enough he'll listen. Men! hurumphh!~Ames

  7. I can relate except i would never hit dh with a glass of rootbeer Well done

  8. Oh yeah, but anything worth having is worth a bumpy road!

  9. Hmmm.....
    Sounds like some converstaion skills are surely needed. They most diffently need help.
    Cute take on the prompt!

  10. I played this scene out too many times with my first husband. He didn't get root beer--He got a jar of Tang!!

  11. I loved this and Ames' comment. It's a very real/common conversation. The guy deserves to be hit over the head by something a lot stronger than root beer.

  12. This totally cracked me up! I loved this.

    Clever, clever you!

    Thanks for the smile and the creative use of the prompt.

  13. good for her. I'm so glad she did that. I probably would have thrown it much earlier when he was doing the whole charlie brown's teacher. the poophead.

  14. what .... waste good root beer???? I loved the Charlie Brown's teacher reference!

  15. Whoa, I didn't see that coming! Great story, dialogue and surprise ending!

  16. LOL! Loved this! I agree it's a shameful waste of root beer!


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